Planning - Script Changes

We looked back over our script and thought about the narrative and timings of the lyrics and found that a lot of it was not going to work how we would have liked, so we have changed some of the narrative to fit better with the music. We also had to think about whether it made sense to just start the narrative in the beginning of the song, from looking at it we found that it did not make as much sense as we would have liked, so we have added narrative before starting the music.


Added narrative of the letter coming through the letter box at a birds-eye view shot before the music starts
Different shots of the performer have been added - panning shot.
no match on action shot of her opening the letter, using a reaction shot instead when she is reading it
over shoulder shot of the letter
boy looking at letter and then girl waiting for reaction, reaction happening and then looking down at the letter
high angle shot of performer
Girl putting her things away looks up at the photoframe on the drawer, back to close up shot of performer then back to girl
Low angle shot of girl looking at the photoframe blurry going into a flash back
Back and girl walking hand in hand down the path, angle starting at their feet walking towards the camera as it zooms out
performance in the middle
high angle shot os boy and girl, boy turns her around and puts a necklace on her, using a range of shots to show it and emphasising how much it means to her then she turns back and he is gone
performance - sitting on the stool
Boy sends text to her but she didnt take her phone with her to University
shot of her phone on the side lighting up
Editing have to had a caption
Back to back shot is still in there, but he is playing guitar and she is looking at her phone
she sends a text back
After she has left her house and it has gone back to the performer there is a shot of her walking down the road and going round the corner
Back to performance for 6 seconds
we only changed that it would be an extreme close up of her knocking on the door
over shoulder shot of him answering the door
mid shot of him coming outside slowly approaching her
back to performance again
instead of a close up its a over the shoulder shot of him looking at her as he places his hands around her face
mid shot from the side with sun in the background as he moves in to kiss her
no shot of the girl looking at him
close up on the kiss
back to performer before black out!

All of these are changes that have been made during the timing process as we found that our narrative did not completely make sense, so we have made it more clear with a range of shots and changed the narrative to flow better. These changes can also be found on the timings script, and the original script is also on the blog.